@alpha1906 the prologue isn’t anywhere else the manuscript, but offers connectivity later.

@j-hubbz I’m reading in parts:

I love the tease, even though I’m not a big proponent of prologues. If it’s in the story, then just start that tease as Chapter 1. It’s great backstory that does a wonderful job of doing a bunch of things: I know the stakes, but the mystery about what happened is still there. Since we play with time and…

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@alpha1906 your 1st chapter is genius. I was laughing out loud multiple times. Mother was an apt name for mother. I liked how “because” was tied into the pain of having an absentee parent. I loved how institutions of higher education were called on the carpet for their exploitive nature. I can’t wait for more!

@j-hubbz I’ll read this later tonight. Thanks for uploading!!!

Love the first sentence! “Every day, rain or shine, I sat on the worst bench on the UCLA campus.” I also love that just moments into reading, I had a clear picture of this character’s life and personality without having anything spelled out for me outside of this little slice of life. Before any backstory, before a first name, I start…

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This a prologue and chapter 1 to a dark Black Academia project I’ve completed entitled “Fraudulent”. I’m in the process of refining. Thanks all for the help in advance.

Prologue

In the wee hours of an early September morning in 1986, I was speeding down California Highway 13, a tree-lined stretch of road weaving through the Oakland hills. Through…

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